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Give Fiction Readers What They Want: Someone to Care About

on October 12, 2016



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I read a lot of novels, usually at least one per week. And I get asked by a lot of authors to read their new releases.

I feel honored and privileged to be asked, so I read as many as I possibly can while not neglecting the titles I select for myself. But I have become very picky.

Besides being an author, I am a reader desiring quality entertainment just like the rest.

While attending to a good plot, or a good personal problem to solve in a character-driven novel, a few authors ignore this duty: to give the readers the emotional connection they want. And only those important to the story, if you please.

From my experience as a reader, that has everything to do with point of view.

I need a single POV (point of view) character, or at most, two POV characters. I enjoy getting into one or two main characters’ heads and viewing or feeling everything as though I’m in their skin. That’s deep POV, and I crave it, particularly in contemporary fiction. I find it jarring to jump around among several characters’ POVs, whether it’s for each scene or each chapter. Just when I get emotionally attached to a character—BAM!—the door slams shut and I have to get used to someone else. I only have the time and emotional energy to connect with and care deeply about one or two characters, not three, four, five, or six. And yes, sometimes authors use that many POVs.

The justification by the author for multiple POVs is typically that he or she wants the reader to know what all those characters are thinking. But why? Is every thought in their heads important to the advancement of the plot? Most often, I find that they are not.

And there’s the problem—the author is writing what the author wants. Not what the reader may want. The reader may not care what each and every character who appears more than once in a story is thinking. And may not have time to care.

In YA (young adult) fiction, where the focus of the story and the POV character(s) should be the young people, why would an author want to place the reader inside a parent’s or other adult’s head? And yet I see that sometimes, when it adds nothing to the story.

I appreciate the skill of an author who can tell me everything I need to know about the story through the eyes of one character. Maybe two, as in a romance or possibly a crime thriller.

Like me, readers want to feel a strong emotional connection that will carry them throughout a story. They want to care what happens to the main character(s) in the end, even if they want the bad guy to get his just desserts. My feeling is, that level of caring does not apply to every POV character in some otherwise good stories.

So please, have mercy on my tired reader’s brain and my emotional health. Place me inside the heads of only the characters that truly need to tell me their story.

Cynthia T. Toney

6 responses to “Give Fiction Readers What They Want: Someone to Care About

  1. I stopped reading a novel by a mega-selling author only a few chapters in when the story had jumped to the FOURTEENTH point of view! It was too much for me. I prefer a very limited number of POVs too.


    • Fourteen! Keep that book far, far from me. I tried to watch a movie that introduced six different characters or sets of characters in the opening, devoting only a few minutes to each point of view. After introductions, I didn’t care enough about any of them to continue watching. I need time with a character to warm up to him or her.

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  2. As an editor, I see a wide variety of POVs in the manuscripts I edit. I often suggest cutting back on how many they use. I sometimes wonder if screenplay techniques are making their way into novels.


  3. Abby says:

    I think about this very thing every time I read a novel. More often than not, I become overwhelmed and bored having to pay attention to multiple points of view, and the book immediately goes to the shelf. I would love to read your crime thriller, by the way! Have you considered writing one?


    • Thank you, Abby. My crime thriller is a coming-of-age historical set in 1920s Louisiana, with a male teen protagonist. Wow, I’ve really mixed genres, haven’t I? I hope to see the book published in the near future.


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